20分鐘如何寫出托福高分作文

現(xiàn)在很多網(wǎng)上流傳的滿分托福作文，大多是語(yǔ)言能力極好的英語(yǔ)老師，在充裕時(shí)間下(也許1個(gè)小時(shí)以上)，慢功細(xì)活，逐步構(gòu)建出的完美文章。其特征，經(jīng)常是，每個(gè)分論點(diǎn)都清晰簡(jiǎn)潔的列在分論段段首第一句。分論點(diǎn)后接一句句法和單詞都非常高大上的長(zhǎng)難句。后面跟更多的高大上解釋。但其實(shí)，想在考場(chǎng)上僅有的30分鐘內(nèi)做到這一點(diǎn)，即便是這些老師自己，也是非常困難的。那么，考場(chǎng)上的20分鐘，如何做到高分作文？

所以筆者的寫作課程一直強(qiáng)調(diào)大家練習(xí)的，反而是寫好簡(jiǎn)單句，和使用簡(jiǎn)單，但是準(zhǔn)確詞匯的能力。其實(shí)練好簡(jiǎn)單句，才是托福寫作提分最速成的方法。所以近期會(huì)推出一個(gè)系列，就是筆者自己在限時(shí)情況下(20分鐘左右)，嘗試解一些以前從未寫過的題目。

Agree or Disagree:

A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.

高薪少假 vs. 低薪長(zhǎng)假

Disagree.

Ideally, everybody’s dream job would be one that pays well and at the same time, has a lot of vacation time. However, in the cold, hard reality, we often have to choose between high salary and vacation time when we just enter the work force. I, personally, would choose the former.

To begin with, less vacation time would only be a temporary phase, but still a necessary one. I say that our final goal is to earn a lot of money, but simultaneously, have a lot of free time to travel, or to do other things that we want. But, how can we get there? The answer is that we still have to strive for it. We have to learn constantly, even after graduation. Many of my senior classmates, parents, relatives, and teachers tell me the importance of life-long learning. They would say that graduation is the starting point of life. So naturally, if you want to learn and grow fast, you should practice more, strive harder, and constantly reflect on what you are doing. To get more practice opportunities, of course, you should get a job that provides you with a stage.

Of the two kinds mentioned in the above statement, it is obvious that a job with high pay and less vacation offers you more opportunities to gain experience. Allow me to point out some simple facts. With a normal job, which starts from 9 and ends at 6, an employee works 8 hours a day, 40 hours per week, 2000 hours per year. With a high pay job, however, overtime is always expected. People with higher salaries often works from 9 to 10, or worse. Accordingly, these people might work 14 hours per day, 80 hours per week, 4000 hours per year, which is just equivalent to two people’s workload in a low paid job. In theory, the latter would grow and gain experience twice as fast as the former. What’s more, growing faster brings even more opportunities. Management always love young people with great potential and ambition, and thus would give them more opportunities and responsibilities. The rewards of choosing a high pay job is not linear in regards to the amount of time you invest. The rewards increase exponentially.

Based on the reasons above, I choose jobs with higher pay but less vacation time.

簡(jiǎn)單說一下自己這篇文章的寫作思路。開篇中規(guī)中矩的開頭段。上過強(qiáng)化班的同學(xué)都知道開頭段的三要素：背景引入、改寫題中觀點(diǎn)、提出自己觀點(diǎn)。筆者首先拿所有人的夢(mèng)想中工作，所謂活少錢多型工作，做了個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單引入。第二句，使用簡(jiǎn)單副詞However轉(zhuǎn)折，隨后立即引出并改寫題中觀點(diǎn)。最后第三句，簡(jiǎn)練陳述自己觀點(diǎn) – 高薪少假的工作更好。

通常在考場(chǎng)上時(shí)，由于筆者自身的展開能力較強(qiáng)，基本一個(gè)分論點(diǎn)可以輕松展開到180字以上。所以，在這樣的情況下，可以不用仔細(xì)構(gòu)思文章結(jié)構(gòu)。因?yàn)橹兰幢悴蛔屑?xì)構(gòu)思，也不會(huì)出現(xiàn)一會(huì)寫一半就沒的寫了的尷尬局面。所以這篇文章開頭段寫完以后沒多想，直接在主體段陳述了自己的核心理由，也是筆者最想展開的理由：年輕人必須經(jīng)歷高薪少假的階段。隨后又提到開頭段說到過的話題，我們所有人的最終目標(biāo)是高薪長(zhǎng)假。但我們并不能一步登天，而是要一步一步奮斗。

到這里，大家可以大致看清文章的論證思路了。我們?cè)诰v精練班說過，主體段的展開，其實(shí)是一個(gè)因果邏輯鏈展開和證明的過程?；旧希魏蔚亩温湔归_，其實(shí)都是某個(gè)邏輯鏈AàB的證明過程。仔細(xì)思考的話，不難發(fā)現(xiàn)，其實(shí)筆者的論證思路到這，邏輯鏈條已經(jīng)清晰出現(xiàn)，即高薪少假的工作，可以帶來高薪長(zhǎng)假的工作。同時(shí)，由于這道獨(dú)立寫作題是個(gè)比較對(duì)比題，筆者還要證明的一個(gè)邏輯鏈為，低薪長(zhǎng)假的工作，不能帶來高薪長(zhǎng)假的工作。

基本上，大家看第一個(gè)主體段會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)，筆者在論證的是，想得到高薪長(zhǎng)假的工作，一定要奮斗。而第二個(gè)主體段在論證的是，高薪少假的工作給我們更多奮斗和鍛煉的機(jī)會(huì)。多到什么程度呢?比低薪長(zhǎng)假的工作多一倍。(2000小時(shí)vs. 4000小時(shí)部分)所以我們成長(zhǎng)的也更快。

寫到這里時(shí)，筆者又想到自己以前在會(huì)計(jì)師事務(wù)所加班的經(jīng)歷。通常加班猛的員工會(huì)得到老板的欣賞，因此也會(huì)被給予更多的機(jī)會(huì)和責(zé)任。所以便有了第二個(gè)主體段的第二個(gè)細(xì)節(jié)點(diǎn)What’s more的部分。這部分后來一共只寫了50個(gè)字。這是因?yàn)楣P者發(fā)現(xiàn)自己已經(jīng)寫夠了近400字，所以覺得沒有必要再進(jìn)一步展開了。如果想進(jìn)一步展開的話，這里最后完全可以再加一個(gè)個(gè)人經(jīng)歷的example來支持自己前面的觀點(diǎn)。(高薪少假工作有更多的機(jī)會(huì))如果真的是在考場(chǎng)上，時(shí)間已經(jīng)所剩無(wú)幾的話，那么此時(shí)就是開啟結(jié)尾段之時(shí)。因此，后來直接all in all, 簡(jiǎn)單一句陳述結(jié)論：我選擇高薪少假的工作。

不過最后同學(xué)們可能會(huì)有疑問說，老師，我如果展開能力沒那么強(qiáng)，字?jǐn)?shù)寫了半天沒湊夠，那咋整?或者有同學(xué)會(huì)問說，老師，有沒有一個(gè)操作性更強(qiáng)的方法?或者說是步驟化的方法?告訴我第一步該干什么，第二步，第三步分別干什么?第一個(gè)問題答案：練習(xí)展開能力。第二個(gè)問題答案依然是肯定的。